Wednesday, December 20, 2006

An Embarrassing Experience draft 1

There had a very embarrassing experience in my childhood. One day, I went to the park with my parents. I played a ball alone, at the same time my parents sat on a chair and looked at me. I played so happy that I didn't see my parents. I felt scared so I cried. And I started looking for them. I saw a man who was familiar to my dad. I ran into him, gave him a hug and called him dad. The man perceived strange but he didn't say anything I just still cried and cried.
My parents saw the situation which was so funny and same here to say sorry to the man."It's okay." the man smiled. I hid behined my father. Finally, we went home with happiness. To look a stranger as my father, that's an embarrassing experience for me.

5 comments:

Dora said...

"I hid behined my father."
"behined" should change "behind"

娜娜 said...

*I ran into him.*
*into* should change *to*

Fanny said...

"he didn't say anything I just still cried and cried."
between "anything" and "I" should plus "and".

Jenny said...

"There had a very embarrassing experience in my childhood."
"There had" change into "There was"

美萱 said...

" There had " can change into
" There was ".